This is my response to the prompt at Friday Fictioneers, a slightly less than 100 word story. It is also my entry for the A-Z Challenge, with C for Closed.
Genre: Realistic Fiction
After running for over a mile, Meghan reached the store.
A flipped-around sign marked Closed. Glass. Ten tile-covered feet.
It might as well have been a mile, might as well have been concrete and mortar.
Brick. Mortar. That gives her an idea.
Glass shatters. In she walks. In a display case near the door, she finds what she needs.
Bills and a hastily scrawled apology lay discarded on a bare counter. The sign in the unbroken window still reads Closed.
I actually wrote several different versions of this story in my head, with different things being what she’d gone to grab (some the object of an addiction, others a genuine emergency). I decided it would be better to leave it with some ambiguity.
What do you think?
20 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers & A-Z Challenge: Closed”
Nicely done! I miss fiction writing and I can’t wsit to get bact to it.
Good luck with the rest of the challenge!
Thanks Doreen! Same to you! I’m finally getting around to reading posts and I was very much touched by your non-fiction stuff, so it is all good.
I am horrible at commenting and “I like it” just sounds so hollow to me but I did like it and I’m trying to get better about commenting.
I’m sorry, but I don’t understand this.
Thanks for the feedback Joy. I may have pared it down too much.
I thought it was an emergency.
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Hi, I am one of Lisa’s Live Wires and am helping with the Challenge. Your story created a picture right away in my mind and has me wondering what she needed so quickly. An Rx for someone? Jewelry? A book she couldn’t live without??
I enjoyed reading this and can’t wait to read more throughout the month!
I hope what she needed was worth it!
~Patricia Lynne aka Patricia Josephine~
Member of C. Lee’s Muffin Commando Squad
Patricia Lynne, Indie Author
I always found the word “closed” very depressing…
My first thought was that it would take a lot of bills to cover the cost of the window as well as the item taken. I think knowing it was for a genuine emergency would look good, though a result of addiction might have a nice poignancy. Regardless, I like it.
Thanks Alice. Good reading from you!
..and makes her escape! I like the action.
I was thinking emergency since she ran a mile to get there and was desperate enough to break the glass. An addiction would be a nice touch also.
Thanks Amie. I think you’re right. Probably emergency
Good fast action – quick thinking too. Whatever it was Meghan was after in that display case, she needed it badly. Very intriguing. Well done, Anne. 🙂
I think it works well enough, that the reader can make up his/her mind on what Meghan took, etc.
I wonder if her payment will cover the cost of the shattered window.